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Sandcastle...

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She was beautiful like a sand castle made of dust and tears,
different then any girl I met in my long years.
Eyes of crystal and blue, skin of white and hue, hair of gentle curls,
if love can conquer anything, then with her I take worlds.

She was beautiful like a sand castle made of dimonds and pearls,
different then any girl on any single world.
The days went by as the time stood still, I always loved her and I always will.
She rested in my heart and laid in my arms, even when she's gone she will still.
A girl I like, she says she likes me, but doesnt want a relationship so we've been just 'close'.
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pairobanii's avatar
if love can conqure anything, then with her I take worlds.

That's just a beautiful line.

However, you need a proofer. I'm only saying this b/c you have "Advanced Critique Encouraged."

differant - different
dimons - diamonds (someone else pointed this out already, I think)

:) You really should fix it! If someone stepped all over my artwork I'd (bash their head in first) certainly wipe it off.